23 Aug
2012
23 Aug
'12
6:19 p.m.
On 23.08.2012, at 14:12 , Tore Anderson wrote:
* Niall O'Reilly
Please find an initial version of our proposal attached.
Hi,
Having read through very quickly, I'm in general supportive, but I don't think this belongs in the policy text itself:
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It sounds more like rationale to me (although not a very good one, in my opinion). The next two paragraphs suffice as policy.
There is a lot of such things in the proposal. It would benefit from a very clear separation of rationale, referenced policies, new policy and explanations. Clear and plain policy language should be kept clearly separate from the other parts and should not repeat other existing policy language, but reference it. Daniel